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Hero
I kinda just want to get in my car and drive...
..drive and drive and drive until I'm lost
and then sit on the side of the road and cry until I can't breathe
and slice the heck out of my arms, just for old time's sake
and stain my clothes with my blood
and then I want to drive and drive until
I find someone else crying on the side of the road
and I want to hug them.
I want to hold them and cry with them and show them what bleeding on purpose does to people.
I want to show them that the way I am treating myself and have treated myself
is not the answer
There are better ways to live
There are better ways to care
You can move forwar
Literature
Rescue Me
Help me breathe
So I can see
The life within me
Please don't leave;
While I'm alone
I bereave
How do you not see?
I stand before you,
Barely on my feet.
This heart of mine
That barely beats,
Cracked in my frail hands .
My feet do not move,
They will not budge.
The past & fear holds me
Who will be my wings?
And lift me away
Far from the dark
And into the light
Please save me
From this girl I see
She stands before me
With frail hands
Holding a barely beating heart
In my mirror
Rescue me
I'm hurting
Drowning in tears
Aching to breathe
Wanting love
Literature
I've Never Wanted To Be A Hero
The spotlight doesn't suit me well
Behind the scenes I'm at my best
We all dream of being super heroes
Though we don't want to take the test
A pool of blood brings me perspective
Each shallow breath drives it all home
When you're actually standing at the scene
The moment doesn't shine like chrome
One cell phone call can save a life
Pure chance can stop a fatality
Heroic evenings can be stumbled upon
Nobody dreams of the reality
Telling the family is one tough task
I'd rather run right through a wall
The shocked tears of loved ones pack a punch
I didn't ask for this at all
In this case the men lived and life went on
They carr
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It speaks for itself .....really I couldn't sleep and mind kept going back to this particular day
I was maybe 12 or 13 when this happened ....yeah I know ...messed up huh ?
I was maybe 12 or 13 when this happened ....yeah I know ...messed up huh ?
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Wow.... Just wow.... That is amazing, both the poem and the fact that it's a true story. The scene is depicted well through visual imagery and the adjectives used to describe the scene. The end-rhyme is brilliantly done, it doesn't feel "forced" or "juvenile" as it sometimes can. The stanzas help to break up the action and keep the reader in suspense, again, very well done, and the relaxed language of the piece gives the reader a feeling of not building up that anger often associated with a "fight scene," and it's almost as if the sensei is right there with us. Amazing piece! Definitely your best work! *Stands to give applause*